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#227501 Perpetual Lurker Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:18:58 PM

She has an ego, but RD was never a flat character.

edited 18th Jun '12 1:19:12 PM by PerpetualLurker

#227502 Badwolfwho Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:19:05 PM from Stardust Road

And her insecurities. To name just one trait you missed.

Rainbow is a martial artist. She has a black belt.

edited 18th Jun '12 1:20:07 PM by Badwolfwho

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#227503 Moe Dantes Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:21:15 PM from the Land of Classics

I wouldn't call RD "flat". Especially not that nice plot of hers...

Anyway, gah! I have to go house-sit at a place with no internet. BBL

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#227504 Mio Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:21:48 PM

The magic of sight gags can make anyone a master.

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#227505 Perpetual Lurker Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:23:22 PM

She has a "black belt". For all we know, she could have it in Rex-qwan-do.

#227506 Death Cloud Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:29:08 PM from Horsehead Nebula

I just realized something. Earth Pony elected officials are still incompetent (Mayor Mare), Unicorn royalty is still assholes (Blueblood, I'm not sure if Cadence can be count as Unicorn). Now we need warmongering Pegasus commander.

(I know Mayor is not that bad and we don't about other similar ponies)

Because he know I'm going to go out in this plane and I'm going to remove one of His creations from His universe.

#227507 CDRW Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:29:11 PM

Awesome picture I found on the FOE facebook group.

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#227508 Pannic Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:30:13 PM

Speaking of FOE, I just updated my liveblog!

#227509 Death Cloud Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:36:37 PM from Horsehead Nebula

Yeah, very FOE related.

Funny I just watched review of that game (Sage).

Wait it's her brother head? Ewwww.

Because he know I'm going to go out in this plane and I'm going to remove one of His creations from His universe.

#227510 Bluespade Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:37:23 PM from Texas

Speaking of fanfics, I idly clicked on a link someone had provided the other day of Crisis: Equestria's newest chapter. I had no real intention of reading it but I read the first few pages to see what all the fuss was about. I decided that the writing was decent (better than I expect from most fanfic) but the writer still made a huge number of amateur mistakes and simple bad writing choices. It made me think of rewriting a bit of it and pointing out what was wrong for the sake of interested fanfic writers out there. I'm not sure if this idea makes me arrogant or not, or whether anyone would actually be interested in it.

Element of Dullness.

#227511 kegisak Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:39:49 PM

I'd be very interested in that, actually, though only to a degree. Which is to say, to the degree where we have some assurance that you do know what you're talking about in a professional capacity rather than just saying "This is how I think it should have gone"

#227512 Death Cloud Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:41:15 PM from Horsehead Nebula

You just want rewrite few pages or more?

Sounds interesting, but you could ask author (he should be in that fic tread).

Because he know I'm going to go out in this plane and I'm going to remove one of His creations from His universe.

#227513 Bluespade Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:42:41 PM from Texas

I don't suppose I do. I've been writing for about 13-14 years now, and I've completed one novel and written at least 2000 pages of various others, but I've yet to successfully publish anything so there's no official way I can claim that my writing is high quality. Still, I am confident in saying that I can at least recognize bad writing when I see it and know how to fix it.

Just a bit, for the sake of demonstration. I had no idea the author was a troper.

edited 18th Jun '12 1:43:16 PM by Bluespade

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#227514 Swasfews Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:43:50 PM from New York

Ganon doesn't post in the CEQ thread. One of his editors does, though. I'd personally like to see what the "bad writing choices" would be. I have a hard time seeing faults like that in things sometimes. Posting in the thread for the fanfic would probably be better than here though.

This, pretty much.

edited 18th Jun '12 1:45:24 PM by Swasfews

#227515 Badwolfwho Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:45:01 PM from Stardust Road

Outside of spelling errors it's really hard for me to see bad writing.

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#227516 CDRW Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:46:11 PM

Honestly, that seems like a dick move.

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#227517 Death Cloud Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:47:01 PM from Horsehead Nebula

My bad. Judnging from his post I mistaked him for author.

Because he know I'm going to go out in this plane and I'm going to remove one of His creations from His universe.

#227518 Swasfews Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:49:26 PM from New York

And yeah, rewriting it would be kind of a dick move. I would think criticism would be good if there really are problems, though.

Well, I mean just rewriting it like that out of nowhere would be. Giving critique is good.

edited 18th Jun '12 1:57:12 PM by Swasfews

#227519 Bluespade Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:53:52 PM from Texas

Honestly, that seems like a dick move.

Yeah, I thought some might see it that way. It's just one of the things I do sometimes when I am critiquing someone's work. I write a little paragraph pointing out what I think is wrong with it, and a solution, and then I often say something like "I'd use something like this" and then rewrite it in my own way. It's never meant to be anything more than a suggestion.

Pretty much everyone I've ever critiqued has told me that I'm very, very helpful, so it's always been appreciated so far. /shrug.

I like critiquing.

edited 18th Jun '12 1:59:37 PM by Bluespade

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#227520 CDRW Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:58:43 PM

I came across this in the Should Fox stop picking up Seth Mcfarlane stuff thread.

I've seen this old story...

It's happening all over again: The Dark Age of Comic Books, in a degree, translated to animated shows: we had some really good adult comedies like The Simpsons, South Park, Beavis And Butthead and Duckman (I don't find Family Guy funny at all, not even the earlier seasons) that had shock value but also had good stories and pretty smart satire.

Now the producers are just greenlighting any show that has shock value Completely Missing the Point and not realizing that people loved the earlier comedies NOT because they seemed "edgy" for the sake of being edgy, but because they were actually very good written.

If history has taught us anything, the modern adult animated comedies will reach a point where it will just not work anymore...probably it's starting to happen already: more "light-hearted show" like Adventure Time and My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic are the ones caughting more fans and atention: less cynisism and sarcasm, more sincerity and entusiasm.

And it makes me fear very much for what will happen to cartoons as a result of MLP. If there's one thing that's been demonstrated by executives at large, it's that they don't understand why we like this show so much. Even the Hub, with what they said about wanting Care Bears to become the next brony-style movement.

edited 18th Jun '12 1:58:53 PM by CDRW

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#227521 Bluespade Mon, 18th Jun '12 1:59:42 PM from Texas

TO CLARIFY, I'm not talking about rewriting the story, or even a whole chapter, or even a whole segment of the chapter. I'm more talking about rewriting specific lines, maybe paragraphs, to give indication of what one better way to do it would be.

edited 18th Jun '12 1:59:50 PM by Bluespade

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#227522 Pannic Mon, 18th Jun '12 2:00:06 PM

Even the Hub, with what they said about wanting Care Bears to become the next brony-style movement.

Was that actually the Hub, or just Amid on Cartoon Brew being an ass as usual?

#227523 Swasfews Mon, 18th Jun '12 2:00:08 PM from New York

I'm pretty sure the Care Bears thing wasn't the Hub. It was one guy.

@Blue. Are you talking about stuff like the run-on sentences, and italicization? If you are, that's common criticism.

edited 18th Jun '12 2:02:04 PM by Swasfews

#227524 CDRW Mon, 18th Jun '12 2:00:56 PM

I thought he was speaking for the network, but if not that's a lot better.

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#227525 Perpetual Lurker Mon, 18th Jun '12 2:01:20 PM

It was one guy who was promptly fired, regardless of who he worked for.

edited 18th Jun '12 2:01:37 PM by PerpetualLurker