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#368376 Morning Star 1337 Sat, 18th May '13 10:40:41 PM

I have a question that I would ask on the fanfic thread (if the post activity doesn't look like a Ghost Town) But I would like some Opinions on my Fics (or at least "The Path of Absolution - Punishment") And I was wondering if someone can look over "Punishment" for flaws in the story?

And I already did post this on the Fanfic thread, but no one responded. I'm sorry if I'm acting impatient again.

edited 18th May '13 10:41:54 PM by MorningStar1337

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#368377 storyyeller Sat, 18th May '13 10:45:36 PM from Appleloosa

How long is it? And are you looking for proofreading, comments on the story quality, or what?

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#368378 Morning Star 1337 Sat, 18th May '13 10:49:23 PM

Both and I think it maybe around 2500-3500 words so far. I'm writing a Deconstruction Fic (The Path of Absolution - Forgoveness) and an Accusation/Dark Fic (The Path of Absolution - Punishment) And I need some help with the latter.

Also i think we should continue this in the Fanfic thread.

edited 18th May '13 10:50:09 PM by MorningStar1337

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#368379 storyyeller Sat, 18th May '13 10:55:10 PM from Appleloosa

Do you have a link?

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#368380 Ace Of Scarabs Sat, 18th May '13 11:27:28 PM from Singapore

Boop :3

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#368381 storyyeller Sat, 18th May '13 11:29:51 PM from Appleloosa

Needs more Erfworld.

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#368382 Morning Star 1337 Sun, 19th May '13 12:07:16 AM

@storyyeller Here's the 1st chapter

and here's the seconf chapter

Iff you have any comments you can leave them on the chapters if you have a Google account. Otherwise please leave a post on this thread

. I gotta go. It's past midnight where i'm am. See ya in the morning.

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#368383 Kyler Thatch Sun, 19th May '13 12:08:43 AM

I wonder if the Dread Pirate Roberts, as a concept, would work with ponies.

Am I hurting? Am I sad? Should I stay or should I go?

I've forgotten how to tell. Did I ever even know?

#368384 Ace Of Scarabs Sun, 19th May '13 12:23:43 AM from Singapore

EQG: r63 Brad

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#368385 storyyeller Sun, 19th May '13 12:30:10 AM from Appleloosa

I wonder if the Dread Pirate Roberts, as a concept, would work with ponies.

Well Pipsqueak shows that they do have pirates.

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#368386 Kyler Thatch Sun, 19th May '13 12:32:36 AM

EQG: r63 Brad

So... Bree?

But do they do anything?

Am I hurting? Am I sad? Should I stay or should I go?

I've forgotten how to tell. Did I ever even know?

#368387 Meta Four Sun, 19th May '13 1:05:52 AM from riding the wave

Nah, they just stay at home and lie around.

And, since today is apparently National Jump To Conclusions Day...

#368388 Kyler Thatch Sun, 19th May '13 2:00:22 AM

And if I ask them to do anything?

Am I hurting? Am I sad? Should I stay or should I go?

I've forgotten how to tell. Did I ever even know?

#368389 crimsonstorm 15 Sun, 19th May '13 2:08:43 AM from A parallel universe

they'll just tell you they don't do anything*.

you're stronger than you think you are.

#368390 Ace Of Scarabs Sun, 19th May '13 3:23:33 AM from Singapore

human!Dashie

human!Dashie and Pinkie :3

Trust Me

edited 19th May '13 3:24:44 AM by AceOfScarabs

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#368391 Death Cloud Sun, 19th May '13 4:11:17 AM from Horsehead Nebula

http://www.derpibooru.org/289475?scope=scpe6903f62fef37849e68d99722883625281f5b7118

Pinkie vs SPC 173.

Because he know I'm going to go out in this plane and I'm going to remove one of His creations from His universe.

#368392 Applelight Limited Sun, 19th May '13 4:24:51 AM from Manehattan to Canterlot

Ahoy hoy.

Not feeling very well today. Still have a lot of work to do. Missed my favourite season one episode on the hangout yesterday. Not a good weekend.

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#368393 Ace Of Scarabs Sun, 19th May '13 4:47:13 AM from Singapore

Cheer up Apple, once you finish your assignment you'll have more free time :D

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#368394 Death Cloud Sun, 19th May '13 5:00:16 AM from Horsehead Nebula

I don't what get into me that I watched another Friendship Is Witchcraft episode. That is so unfunny that is now depressing :/

Because he know I'm going to go out in this plane and I'm going to remove one of His creations from His universe.

#368395 Applelight Limited Sun, 19th May '13 5:03:59 AM from Manehattan to Canterlot

It feels like it'll never be done.

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#368396 Ace Of Scarabs Sun, 19th May '13 5:10:11 AM from Singapore

Adorable mail

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#368397 edvedd Sun, 19th May '13 5:18:24 AM from Over there. Maybe?

I likes that r63 Brad.

Man, if his name actually ends up being Brad...

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#368398 Applelight Limited Sun, 19th May '13 5:22:16 AM from Manehattan to Canterlot

I heard it was dreamy cutebottom.

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#368399 NE Sgamer 190 Sun, 19th May '13 5:25:11 AM from a NES cartridge

I'm awake... and a slightly weird dream involving survivor in pirate form and our lovable ponies was had, though didn't have much details to tell. Of what I know, Applejack was one of the opposing ship.

Anyways, what did I miss?

It's a Demonic Lighthouse Slide! WHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! I beg of you, Durza, make it so.

-Azreal

#368400 edvedd Sun, 19th May '13 5:31:40 AM from Over there. Maybe?

Very cute.

(Eq G)

edited 19th May '13 5:31:47 AM by edvedd

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