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edited 25th May '11 5:07:28 PM by FallenLegend
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That's actually pretty solid work.
edited 25th May '11 5:58:27 PM by Astrosimi
, a 300 words pseudo-drabble I wrote in a spun of 15 minutes.
@kegisak Well, there isn't much to be said, really. I like the almost rhythmic writing and the concept behind the "wrongness", it's an interesting short piece of fiction that constantly makes the reader wonder what happened without dragging it for too long. I won't say it's "good" or "bad", because the plot itself feels a bit too vague for me to rate, guess it'll depend on how well you can establish your 'verse.
How do you mean, establishingg the verse, exactly? Because I had planned for this to be a part of a larger universe thing, but I can't recall if I've ever actually said that, or does it just come across as something that could or would be built upon?
edited 25th May '11 6:44:50 PM by kegisak
I'll be honest with you, I got a little lost at the part where he's recounting the world ending for him. I'm not sure whether he was part of a parallel earth and he got sent here and turned into a pony or something. From what I could gather he used to be a human until his world ended, but I'm not clear on that, which is really the only problem I had with the fic, which otherwise was a very enjoyable read.
I think I will practice them more
edited 25th May '11 8:00:14 PM by FallenLegend
You should. That's much better than anything I could draw. It would probably take me like a day and a half to come up with a drawing like that.
edited 25th May '11 7:40:10 PM by JapaneseTeeth
edited 25th May '11 9:06:05 PM by storyyeller
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... Any suggestions to a name or profession...?
