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#4901 Japanese Teeth Wed, 18th May '11 9:26:25 PM from Meinong's jungle from Meinong's jungle

FOREVER

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#4902 kegisak Wed, 18th May '11 9:42:53 PM

We're never going to stop with that, are we?

Allright, go ahead, we all know I was asking for it.

#4903 the Librarian Wed, 18th May '11 9:57:34 PM from his own little world from his own little world

No. We're going to continue it....

FOREVER!

Tick Tock, goes the clock/ He cradled and he rocked her/ Tick Tock, goes the clock/Till River kills the Doctor.

#4904 Bindlestick Wed, 18th May '11 10:06:35 PM from the top of the sky from the top of the sky

Yes. We will continue to reference it...

INDEFINATELY

#4905 Pannic Wed, 18th May '11 10:16:34 PM

And we'll stop with it...

SOMETIME LATER

#4906 Crowfall Wed, 18th May '11 10:16:42 PM

It will be brought up...

EVERLASTINGLY

#4907 Runic Wed, 18th May '11 10:20:13 PM from Here and Now from Here and Now

Because when they say

FOREVER

They mean

FOREVER

"Well, it seemed like a good idea at the time..."

#4908 Kyler Thatch Wed, 18th May '11 10:20:43 PM from the bottom of my heart from the bottom of my heart

If you want to know what the future is like, imagine a pink pony whispering in your ear

FOREVER

But apart, all we are is just a pile of mush and some crumbly dry mess...

#4909 Runic Wed, 18th May '11 10:24:10 PM from Here and Now from Here and Now

"Well, it seemed like a good idea at the time..."

#4910 Crowfall Wed, 18th May '11 10:30:32 PM

Well then, this

is for you!

#4911 Runic Wed, 18th May '11 10:32:26 PM from Here and Now from Here and Now

It isn't really. I just made the avvie, so.

.... I need more avvies of ponies...

edited 18th May '11 10:32:55 PM by Runic

"Well, it seemed like a good idea at the time..."

#4912 Pannic Wed, 18th May '11 10:36:09 PM

Is there anything that hasn't been made into a pony?

I'm willing to bet that if there is, it's something I like.

#4913 Runic Wed, 18th May '11 10:38:14 PM from Here and Now from Here and Now

Well, when you even have a pony-ized avvie for a parody of a translated/garbled version of a show from a different continent, I doubt there's anything that hasn't or won't get pony'd.

"SCREW THE RULES, I'M A PONY."

edited 18th May '11 10:39:48 PM by Runic

"Well, it seemed like a good idea at the time..."

#4914 Crowfall Wed, 18th May '11 10:40:00 PM

Rule 42: If it exists, there are ponies of it. No exceptions.

You can screw the rest of the rules, but not this one.

edited 18th May '11 10:40:42 PM by Crowfall

#4915 Runic Wed, 18th May '11 10:42:01 PM from Here and Now from Here and Now

If we're screwing all the other rules...

"Go beyond reality! Make everything ponies and kick logic to the curb! Yours is the rainboom that will pierce the heavens!"

"Well, it seemed like a good idea at the time..."

#4916 Crowfall Wed, 18th May '11 11:03:17 PM

Who the hell do you think I am? I'm Scootaloo, the Cutie Mark Crusader!

#4917 Moe Dantes Wed, 18th May '11 11:21:49 PM from the Land of Classics from the Land of Classics

Nah. She'll nurse you back to health in her basement. Where she'll keep you. Forever!

Hmmm... nursemaided by Fluttershy for all eternity... that doesn't sound so bad.

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#4918 Forzare Wed, 18th May '11 11:39:47 PM from Hinamizawa from Hinamizawa

^^^I am so stealing that.

Nil, a new sci-fi/horror story that you should read and review! (Updated 9/22) The gate opens.

#4919 Moe Dantes Wed, 18th May '11 11:42:00 PM from the Land of Classics from the Land of Classics

Incidentally, I'm having problems with my own fanfic. The first chapter is almost done but it reads like a huge infodump. I'm not sure if I should just go with it and let the rest of the story make up for that.

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#4920 Runic Wed, 18th May '11 11:43:21 PM from Here and Now from Here and Now

Theif!

"Well, it seemed like a good idea at the time..."

#4921 Crowfall Wed, 18th May '11 11:53:33 PM

That's tricky. If you have too big an infodump right off the bat, people won't stick around for the good stuff. It's usually best to start with something exciting, and give them the info once they're invested. Can you post what you have to Google docs or something?

#4922 Moe Dantes Thu, 19th May '11 12:17:37 AM from the Land of Classics from the Land of Classics

Yep, I just now figured out how to do things on Google Docs.

Warning: first draft reads like a first draft.

My brain is fried now so I'm gonna call it a night.

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#4923 Crowfall Thu, 19th May '11 2:39:08 AM

An unstoppable gunk that can devour cities? Oh my gosh, your villain is the smooze!

Anyway, the exposition isn't overwhelming. It could probably be trimmed down a bit, but that's just an issue of it being a first draft, I think. If you're going to go with a Spike POV make sure you're consistent with it. It only really feels like Spike talking at the beginning and when something is directly happening to him, and when Twilight was gathering everyone up, I got the sense she ran out on her own, which makes Spike narrating those events odd. Also, heh at Twilight having a Soarin pinup.

edited 19th May '11 2:39:44 AM by Crowfall

#4924 Moe Dantes Thu, 19th May '11 4:14:50 AM from the Land of Classics from the Land of Classics

Yes, the black water is inspired by the Smooze.

And yes, I was sorely aware that the Spike-voice was poorly maintained. Looking at it, I think fixing that problem goes hand-in-hand with fixing the other one. If I can't eliminate all the infodump I can at least make it entertaining, right?

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#4925 Ack Sed Thu, 19th May '11 6:29:50 AM from Pure Imagination from Pure Imagination

We've had "rraaagh hate" and "squee lovelovelove", here's "hmm, okay"

.

"the worst feeling in the world is not thinking anybody else feels the same as you, but you'd be surprised how many people do."Thom Yorke